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May 17, 2005 14:33:04 GMT -5
Post by Audie Smith on May 17, 2005 14:33:04 GMT -5
Post Any Reviews You Have For Dear Diary Here!
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May 24, 2005 17:52:21 GMT -5
Post by Jacquie on May 24, 2005 17:52:21 GMT -5
Review For Chapter 1:
Alright, I liked how you started off this story. You gave a great background about the ' you ' character and described emotion very well. I think my favorite part about this chapter was the 'find ed' flashback, that was awesome! Good job on this and keep up the good work!
From Jacquie
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May 24, 2005 18:00:08 GMT -5
Post by Jacquie on May 24, 2005 18:00:08 GMT -5
Review for Chapter 2:
I liked this chapter as much as the last one, but it was kind of, um, I don't know how to put this, I guess a bit "draggy" I think you spent too long explaining the store thing. Don't get me wrong, I liked it, but it just, Oh I dunno, but I'm not trying to flame you, so please don't yell at me. Anyways, what I did like about this chapter was how you blended reality in with the flashbacks as they were happening, I found that it all happened at a good pace and it was very interesting. Good writing, keep up the good work!
From Jacquie
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May 24, 2005 18:08:33 GMT -5
Post by Jacquie on May 24, 2005 18:08:33 GMT -5
Review for chapter 3:
Okay now you're building up the suspense really well, I'm dying to know if Ed and Al ever actually appear to the reader in the story other than in flashbacks! I liked this chapter's pace and how it relayed the memories once again.
From Jacquie
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May 24, 2005 18:13:30 GMT -5
Post by Jacquie on May 24, 2005 18:13:30 GMT -5
Review for Chapter 4:
Black munchkin...lol ;D. I got the biggest kick out of that, and I still have no idea why. Go figure I'm Jacquie....*shrugs*Anyways, I think the paint flashback was my favorite part of this chapter, it was really well written. Good job!
From Jacquie
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May 24, 2005 18:17:47 GMT -5
Post by Jacquie on May 24, 2005 18:17:47 GMT -5
Review for Chapter 5:
Alright, I loved this chapter, I think the best part was the end. The description was phenominal and I liked how you outright told the reader what their feelings for ed were. You didn't subtly hint at it like you've been doing for the rest of the story - that was well written. Good job and I cannot wait for the next chapter!
From Jacquie
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May 24, 2005 19:46:43 GMT -5
Post by Jacquie on May 24, 2005 19:46:43 GMT -5
Review for Chapter 6:
I loved this chapter! I thought the way you described Ed as the news of 'your' death hit him was amazing for lack of a better word. It was really well written, and I think the best part was the very end, how you emphasized 'she was murdered'. Well done *applause can be heard in the background*, very well done.
From Jacquie
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May 31, 2005 5:17:40 GMT -5
Post by Ravashi on May 31, 2005 5:17:40 GMT -5
HAHA I follow your story around ;D so now I review on it at 3 sites ^_^ I like the this site too. Continue soon with your fic, it's great!!!
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Jun 20, 2005 12:01:31 GMT -5
Post by Ravashi on Jun 20, 2005 12:01:31 GMT -5
I just have no words...sooo great...I told you that already on Fantasy Fiction but whatever...
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Sin
New Writer
Kingdom Hearts Obsession
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Jul 23, 2005 16:01:14 GMT -5
Post by Sin on Jul 23, 2005 16:01:14 GMT -5
Your story is just stunning! I love it! No... I love Ed! Yay Ed! But.... /I/ died! How unfair! And by a big mean person too....
Well, Rock On!
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Aug 14, 2005 2:31:35 GMT -5
Post by Ravashi on Aug 14, 2005 2:31:35 GMT -5
WOW new chapter was soo GOOD ^__^ I think it's my fav for now ^__^ I really love your story ^__^
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Rose Aurion
New Writer
Love is giving the person the ablility to destroy you, but trusting them not to.
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Sept 13, 2005 20:18:16 GMT -5
Post by Rose Aurion on Sept 13, 2005 20:18:16 GMT -5
Finally! Another update!!! (I've been following your stories around from 2, now 3 sites!) This is getting intense. I don't think I can stay on the edge of my seat, cuz when I read this, I think I'll fall off from all the suspence!! Please update soon! (I hate cliffhangers...)
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Jan 26, 2006 0:01:12 GMT -5
Post by edwardshot911 on Jan 26, 2006 0:01:12 GMT -5
You should really update!!!!!! I am dying to know who the flip killed me!!!!!!!!! gahhh!
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